After the initial response to Unchosen and after looking at it again after a month or so, I came to the conclusion that it needed to be better. So I’m doing a full rewrite.
The story is the same, but I’m trying to make it more, well, interesting. I think I sent this one out before it was ready and it’s a little heavy on internal exposition and a little light on external action. Especially in the beginning.
So, I’m fixing that.